Board Thread:Fun and Games/@comment-26222895-20150403152607/@comment-26222895-20150404214349

OK, here is the final poem

A Flight Cut Short

"I want to be a bird,"

she said.

She raised her wings

above her head.

And with a flap

she soared on high.

No worries now,

for she san fly!

But then there was

that little thing,

of which the birdies

never sing.

The hawks, the crows,

starvation too.

She never had

considered flu!

So as she thought,

"Oh, i'm so pleased!

I'm never noticed

in the trees!"

A great big bird

dove down towards Earth,

which put an end

to all her mirth.

I think the which put an end, instead of, and that was the end, improves the rhythim and flow of the last stanza. Correct me if i'm wrong. Once again, thanks for all your help!