Board Thread:Lore Texts/@comment-26149161-20170529222127/@comment-30645975-20170529224730

I would suggest changing the last line of each stanza to these, respectively: In her hair, the skies Yet grief washes her inside  this ones pretty good already (don't put that as the line it's just a comment)  Won't be remembered anymore (kinda changes the meaning, might want to not change)  pretty good It was really only two of them that seemed a little long...