Board Thread:Lore Texts/@comment-25939116-20170811052629/@comment-29773086-20170811083211

I think that you should change 'shalt' to 'shall' on the third line, as shalt is only used (and sounds better as) a second person singular term.

Also, I have issues with the rhythm in some places; the last line seems far too long (9 syllables), as well as the third to last, to match the rest of the poem. Or is that how you intended it to be?