Board Thread:Lore Texts/@comment-30079501-20170606200700/@comment-30079501-20170607203041

Thindithron the Great wrote: Written well, but I think in trying to sound exotic with your wording, it sounds almost a little Shakespearean. And as you must remember, such a text would be either a translation from another language (with probably basic translations) or originally written in 'English' (and therefore use basic vocabulary). This sounds more like a Valinorean's work than a Southron's. In reading it again, that does seem to be the case. This is what happens when I try to write something cool after writing essays for school. xD

Anyways, thank you very much for the critique. I may try to revise it, but (more likely) I may just scrap it and try again, perhaps with a slightly different concept.