Board Thread:Lore Texts/@comment-31308946-20170601010953

This is a poem I wrote about Bilbo and Thorin. Please tell me if you like it or if it needs work!

The world was old, the mountains grey When Bilbo stood and walked away. With Oakenshield this hobbit went On winding road and old paths bent. Many a trouble lay ahead, And soon poor Bilbo longed for his bed. They still went on to erebor's gates, Where Thorin would meet a terrible fate. If you guys like it I will write an extended version of this. And also i will write a lament for Thorin. 
 * 1) written by TheSquidychicken
 * 2) author:{name:dwarf_male}
 * 3) title:Of Bilbo and Thorin
 * 4) types:durins_folk
 * 1) types:durins_folk