Board Thread:Lore Texts/@comment-30645975-20170530042053/@comment-30079501-20170530194617

Campinator wrote: Okay here's what I'm thinking failed -> ceased toppled -> took down their crown If you stress the first syllable of "upon" I think it works, which is how I intended. I mentally read this as "now HALVed in size our BAND of men" and "each SOLdier marked out one-HEAthen", which I believe works? That's the only time I will be writing a 4th wall break, I think, so perhaps it will slide if not many others do. Thanks for those tips!

Yes, "ceased" and "took down" work much better. And I see what you're saying with the other stanzas, especially with "Heathen".

Probably true. Np!