User blog comment:JoetheBladeMaster/Joe's Novel Thingie!/@comment-26360929-20150524222900

It's nice. Congratulations for the willpower to write this! That's why I never got further than short stories. Your style is quite interesting, too. One question, though: Why is it that the presence of Orson's sword is mysterious, but Enlica's bow is perfectly normal? And now the grammar nazi in me just has to add: Watch your commas and they're/their/there. But that has nothing to do with the story, which is great.