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DavidReidHowe wrote: shurtagul asks the guards i meed a glass of water ( the guards at the time were slaves so not smart) when the guards opened the door shurtagul grabbed them and snapped there necks he grabbed their rifle amd ran towards the air hanger, he ran into a squad of 5 jovian guards and he killed them but sffered a shot on hos arm, he reavhed the hangar and hicaked the ship killing the 2 occupants he zoomed out of the hangar stragiht into space. jovian guns open fired but he evaded most of the cannon fire but took 2 hits to one wing knocking it off, shurtaguls aircraft crashed into quebec and he was injured he looked out and saw the battle as that happened a atlas recon force found shurtagul and took him to the wall.. he ordered his new forces that reinforced him 2 months ago to help defending the wall, a very large space fleet appeared from diredpctiom of uranus and neptune, and begun firing and oblivating jovian and udes ships and aiding the allied daleks There are so so so many things wrong with this I don't even know where to begin! Let's start.

What DRH did abysmally wrong part 1:

Prisoners don't get brought water, there's a dispenser. There are no slaves on Venus yet. The Sargoth aren't as dumb as others, and so would never ever leave a slave to guard the door. Slaves don't serve any purpose for the Sargoth besides meat blood and sport. He would have been shot by dozens of guards and automated turrets.

What DRH did abysmally wrong part 2:

He has no way to know how to get to the hangar. There are no jovians on Venus. He could never hope to understand a Sargoth's ship's controls. He couldn't have zoomed off straight into space, the hangar doors wouldn't have opened for him. They are not in space, they are in an underground city. And finally, if by some miracle Shurtagul managed to do all that, the Sargoth fighter would have ben remote detonated, killing him easily.

Conclusion of the What DRH did abysmally wrong saga: Shurtagul is still in Sargoth prison.

Speaking of which, several cloaked war machines have begun to make planetfall, aiding in combat against ATLAS but not the Daleks.